Parenting Book - Editing Tips and Tricks

 Formatting - Organization should factor paragraph breaks.

1. The Three Things You MUST Know About Parenting

Mazel tov! .....

When you have a number of things referred to have an overview of them before getting into it to make it easier for the reader so they don't need to scour through several pages seeking out subtitles to glean the list - this makes it easier to follow. 

2. Here are three things you’ll want to know about this journey:

repetitive

3. When I heard that Rebbetzin Yaffa Shaindel Zilberman and her

husband, Rabbi Yitzchak Shlomo, had raised eighteen children and that

each one became a joyous, righteous, diligent Jew, I was amazed.

Long sentence. Consider shortening. 

4. I was hoping to get some clear, practical solution.

Unclear what is being conveyed. Tighter sentences help with flow.